Revising for a broader perspective

    For the first-write rough draft we passed around last week, my question was about how we can allow healthy food to be more accessible and affordable for low-income families and communities. And I had planned out each topic I wanted to do into ten paragraphs, including topics such as the struggle of poverty-stricken areas, obesity and undernourishment of lower-income families, food stamps and government assistance, and the reason for the price difference with processed and organic foods, and how lower income individuals can have better access and financial ability to purchase healthy foods as a lifestyle. I’ve been debating to change everything entirely because of my indecisiveness and fear that it’s not going to be good enough research, but finally came to terms with the direction I want to be headed.

    I instead decided to change my research question, and incorporate my initial research question as one of the topics in my paragraphs of my paper. I think one of my main problems is the pickiness I have with choosing articles that I feel will thoroughly support my argument, which is therefore why I had chosen to go for a broader question. As I was typing my second draft, barely scratching the surface of the government’s involvement in the food system in America, I had so much more to say and realized that I wanted to base my research on the government’s responsibility to protect American consumers and the power that the food industry giant’s have in the government. I highly encourage everyone to outline each topic they want to focus on for ten paragraphs, it lessens the vagueness feeling of what direction you want to go with your essay. Keep digging deeper in your research and you may keep finding connections and hefty support for your paper. Good luck